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Lesbians are so cool
I think continuously of them
whenever someone mentions beauty.
it is an overly developed reaction
filled with romanticism
hopes
dreams
of countless pink mohawks
small breasts through tee-shirts
gorgeous flirts
with lips like angelina
i'm helpless in the best kind of way.
heh, such a strange and backwards world I live in.
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:iconrobbyp:
RobbyP Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009
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i think continuously about them too!
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009
We speak a similar language then.
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:iconlaurenhak:
laurenhak Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
i love this poem, its so truthful
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2009
More than you know, babe.
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:iconmadbara:
madbara Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009
Very cute ^.^
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009
haha, thanks
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:icontheryak:
theryak Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008
You are nothing short of amazing.
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2008
Well daaaamn skippy, that's a compliment.
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FrozenTheaterD Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
i can relate!

bravo.
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
Heh
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:iconk-x-m:
k-x-m Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
I like this one, though no particular rhyme or rhythm, it was a quick and enjoyable read, actually
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
I try to subtly slip a few instances of alliteration or rhyme in to my poems. Internal rhyme as well. Read it again, keep an eye out.


(You are right though: certainly no definable scheme)
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k-x-m Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
there is a certain rhythm to it, i just couldn't phrase it right. There's blank verse, rather.

But it flowed nicely and as lines got shorter, it had a certain beat, i liked thaaaaaaat.
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
yaaaaay, thank you again :)

I'm writing more and more now. Poetry is a savior of sort.
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:iconk-x-m:
k-x-m Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
good good,
i am not doing anything, and laziness is definitely far from savior..

i just have no skill. Teach me how to do something.
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Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
you speak the truth, laziness gets you nowhere!

Read some poetry first of all!
I find e.e. cummings the most inspirational because of his completely abstract ways of saying things.

this [link] brings you to my favorite of his poems.
after that, find something to write about! Something you like, something you hate.

I wrote a little while back about how I couldn't write... Generally putting words down on the paper makes you interested. Let the words take advantage of you! Don't be afraid to be cliché, just recognize that you are such.

Write about stupid things! Write about fun things! do it! (I have read your vodka poem, I know you have an ear for poetry)
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k-x-m Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2009
but the vodka haiku is not even a haiku, it has wrong form..
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2009
Form shmorm. Form is for japanese, when the syllables are what its all about. I consider it a challenge to write with the correct syllables, but not necessary due to the fundamental differences in our languages.

Write write write! Have you read the crap I have been uploading recently? Just write SOMETHING, and you will be wiser.
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
you speak the truth, laziness gets you nowhere!

Read some poetry first of all!
I find e.e. cummings the most inspirational because of his completely abstract ways of saying things.

this [link] brings you to my favorite of his poems.
after that, find something to write about! Something you like, something you hate.

I wrote a little while back about how I couldn't write... Generally putting words down on the paper makes you interested. Let the words take advantage of you! Don't be afraid to be cliché, just recognize that you are such.

Write about stupid things! Write about fun things! do it! (I have read your vodka poem, I know you have an ear for poetry)
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JohannesCourtens Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008  Professional Photographer
:hug:
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
:hug:
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JohannesCourtens Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008  Professional Photographer
:trout:
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
:iconboobiesplz:
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JohannesCourtens Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008  Professional Photographer
hhaha!
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
I love those damn plz accounts.
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:iconjohannescourtens:
JohannesCourtens Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008  Professional Photographer
Dood! just bought a new lens! Can't wait till i get it :D
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
Oh snap... to replace the old one? Cause now I feel bad. Lol
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:iconjoshinu-panther:
Joshinu-Panther Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
:rofl: Wow, Dorian... wow.
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
Well... y'know. Write what you feel :D
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:iconjoshinu-panther:
Joshinu-Panther Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
:nod: Well said, good sir, well said.
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tamabald Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
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nice one man!!!
:lmao:
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:iconjackdorian:
Jackdorian Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2008
haha, It has been a problem lately.
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